One night in Los Angeles, California in Pickle-Bread Town, a girl named Melissa and her boyfriend named Joey are hanging out with their couple friends named Shayla and Robert at the back of an alley. So the four of the friends were talking about their relationship and their future. Until somebody mysteriously in the shadows grabbed Melissa. She 1screamed for Joey, but it was too late. Joey cried and shrieked that night. At that very moment he ran after the man. Robert and Shayla screamed for Joey to come back, but there was no sign of footsteps running. So the two of them didn’t know what to do, so they ran after him. Five minutes later while running they saw Joey on the ground, bleeding by tape wire on the ground wrapped around his legs.Shayla said “Go help him”. “ No , you get him”, responded Robert. So Shayla went over to help him because Robert was to scared to help. While over there Shayla heard leaves rattling, “Robert come over here and help, I hear a noise”, said Shayla. “ Alright”, answered Robert. When the two grabbed Joey it was too late he was already dead. Shayla and Robert hid behind the bushes.That’s when a man dragged Joey’s body off into the woods; the two followed the hideous man.
This is my story for an assignment in Mr C's Class. I have not finished the story but, please comment for me to right more. Also this is the first paragraph in my story the second paragraph is not finished.